Gill Smith wrote:
> "Will Dockery" wrote in message
> news:78aa0ccf-01f0-42a4-81ed-087137f1e00c@l43g2000hsh.googlegroups.com...
> On Sep 24, 4:28 am, Rob Evans wrote:
>
>>>Jukeboxes! Yeah, sure.
>>
>>Yeah... anyway, Mushmouth, here's a cut from the upcoming CD... a song-
>>poem I call "Twilight Girl":
>>
>>http://www.myspace.com/willdockerytrio
>
>
> I found this a surprisingly pleasant listen.
>
> My tip: DON'Tpost your lyrics. They don't read well as poetry.
>
> But they do their work well enough as song lyrics because you hear enough
> of them to get a sense of verse, chorus and vaguely what's it 's all about.
>
Well, that's Dockery in a toiletbowl --
"vaguely what's it 's all about."
Though your use of "sense" with "verse" and "chorus" is suspicious.
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